Joel Murphy:

The only thing (within the rules) that bothers me is that his head leaves the frame as he's talking. Your actions seem like they have nice timing/spacing though!
NO extra sound fx! Tisk Tisk. Like the concept though. wish you could have shown the idea without cheating.

Aisha Kennett:

Like the twist. But it's against the rule to add extra sound effect.

Walter Morris:

over all not bad, though their are a few moments of awkward movement or jerky movements.

Imon Branch:

the body movement needs a little work