Comments:
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Garry Cleaver:
Love the cut, final sentence and right arm is very good.
Jeff Kamdon:
The cinematography is looking great! The acting choices are great because they're 1) focused around the scene, 2) nice to read, and 3) aren't over exaggerated. Some things need polishing like the up-and-down motion of the standing man while he walks; it could be more natural. The slightly angry facial expression towards the end of the clip doesn't seem to match accented feeling of the voice clip with "frustratingly you." The character designs could suit the tone better, and the acting could have more nuance. The bits of personality you could add from yourself, based on how you feel the acting should be. The props aren't bad, but the setting is about as bad as the character designs.
(This isn't a complaint, but the background color is the same as the empty sides of the video because there's a different aspect ratio. The composition felt awkward for a second until I realized.)
Animator: Bret Kauppila
Description: My first official entry for the 11 Second Club. I didn't try to be ambitious; only to present a scene that felt natural for the audio clip.
Experience: 1 year
Time taken: 1 month