Pauline Champetier:

I understand what you tried to do with the kind of clunky acting in the end, but I feel like it's a bit awkward - and it becomes entertaining because it's awkward but not for the sake of the story. Make sure to match the tone of the soundtrack - unless you do it all along, as some sort of parody.

Steven GUardado:

It was off to a good start, then the staggering of the character from left to right totally ruined the scene.

Nathan Younger:

weird, but it is a style! good job

Carolyn Mennecke:

It started off really well, but the moving back and forth is unnecessary - and I don't understand why the woman has a beard

Jhonsonbill:

I love it.Your idea is the best :)