Gaucelm De Villaret:

Very smooth! Very good, tho I don't know if the first girl is throwing darts because that moment feels awkward... or is angrily shaking a pen.

Jonathan Fontaine:

Nice, i like that she s playing darts.. it s not clear either she is involved in aiming or not.. at first she looks like she is but when she throws it .. it feels like she doesnt care.. Also the two hands on her chest on "me" feels a bit unnatural.. because they are so far right before this move.. usually we tend to be "lazy" in our gestures.. other than that pretty good entry ! the last sentence is very convincing ;)

Kyra Simone:

Niceee movement on 'surprise, surprise'! The first character needs to blink more, especially at 211 and other exasperated moments. And end the shot a little after ending the action! Sometimes I can't see the end of the motion and it's jarring.