Seo Ryong Jaw:

everything is too straight movement. Adding arch for the enitre movement will help improve a lot i think. characters face is mostly down, it would be better to camera Translate down and angle to upward little bit. Audiences want to see singer's face

Michael Launder:

lots of potential here. Think about easing in an out of your movements. especially in the head turn towards the end. have the motion start slowlly, then speed up in the middle, and slow towards the end, it will give lots of life to a simple motion

Bryan Stone:

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Sabrina Winkel:

I would add more realistic color to the girl. Lip sync is a little off. I would have her not move around so much