Rannva Macdonald Arnskov:

There is absolutely no emotion in the face of the character. She needs something. Being sad, or happy, or angry. It feels like she's just rehearsing something she doesn't have any passion about.

On the technical side, the notebook is kinda floating over her hands and doesn't follow their movement. It could have been locked onto the hand instead to make sure it looked like she held it

Bryan Stone:

Camera shots kill this one, Animation although effective is static and detracts from the overall delivery.

Sabrina Winkel:

Lip sync is off. She doesn't move around a lot. She stands still most of the time. I would try to make her move more

Agnelo Fernandes:

Better houses at www.yobi3d.com
nice work though.