Richard Clark:

In general, it lacks the fundamentals

I would suggest learning the simple "bouncing ball" exercise to start understanding the basics of animation. As well as the "flour sack" exercise to understand the spine and hips/root movement.

You should try and shoot reference so that you can get a better idea on how you want to animate your characters.

I would also study composition and how to frame shots. The 1st shot you have so much dead space on the left side. The 2nd shot, too much dead space on the other side.

Paul Lange:

I like your choice of shots.

Jessica Matson:

Always love an over the shoulder angle, but right now you have a little too much empty space. Rotating and zooming the camera in a little would be dope.