Final Rating: 2.93. Finished 204 out of 231 entries.

499 views including the voting period.


Animator: Pedro

Description: Our 1st 11 seconds. We are 1st year students and we just started animation.

Experience: 1st year student

Time taken: 12h


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Lucas Donaldson:

I like when the quasi-aviators cap gets on the table. However, their positions around the table keep changing so it feels like different people are talking with each scene.

Adrian Winchell:

Characters aren't staying alive through their holds, they're freezing in place. Also, your cuts are breaking the 180 degree rule, and between that and no establishing shot, it's really hard to read where these two are relative to one another.

James Hornby:

the simplest thing i would suggest is to check out the 'line of action' for general staging. At the minute its a little confusing/disorienting which character we are listening to because the camera is shifting all over

S J Bennett:

Looks like you had fun with the lipsync, poses are alright too. However.. camera breaks the 360 rule in the first three shots and the animation is super mechanical...

John Kennedy:

this is breaking some camera rules the camera flips 180 and jumps all over the scene. Needs to be simplified

Antoine Boel':

Cameras are pretty confusing, you should keep characters on the same side of screen during the dialog. Might have been your purpose, but I don't really see the point.