Final Rating: 4.20. Finished 101 out of 231 entries.

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Animator: Ayon Bera

Description: Two people was talking about dishes sitting in a restaurant , but they didn't make any order so the waiter just became unconscious.

Experience: 8 months

Time taken: 7 days


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Eric Raffle:

the problem with this shot is that you are only adding animation when its required to add the rest feels dead, do some research on moving holds and acting shots for better motion, you dot the right kind of cameras and outline but as I said only when it was needed, add some human emotion, watch people while they talk and pick on other things they will do while they are talking you will be surprised.

David Ramirez:

Would be cool to see some kind of interaction between the two questioners.
Maybe they look at each other confused after they hear the vegetarian line?
Or maybe, in your same shot @144, have the mustachioed man's hands move in a way that signals the Vegetarian's attention; maybe at "pork" or "chickens", to make it look like the mustached man said it off screen.

Naga Anim:

its very pose to pose but good try

Adrian Winchell:

Doesn't look like he actually drinks. Waiter's dizzy spell is cute, but totally distracts from the foreground animation. I wish there was more character acting here to critique - but your two main characters aren't actually doing a lot.

Alan Yang:

I think the brown guy is animated quite well. In the second shot with the blonde dude, I'm confused with his eye direction for a large portion of the shot, where he seems to not be looking at the guy he's talking to. And I don't think the eye rolls work on the waiter at 249 - what emotion is that supposed to portray? I'd go with something more subtle and realistic, or look at at more reference of cartoony falls.

Mahadev Das:

good animation

Lucas Donaldson:

nice use of camera angles to tell a story. showing one guy, then the other, then both with the waiter in the background getting dizzy.
What might be a good improvement is if you showed the waiter leading up to his dizziness earlier, but not actually falling down until the final scene.

Sabrina Winkel:

I like how you had a third character in there. I like the idea you had