Final Rating: 3.87. Finished 97 out of 121 entries.

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Animator: Richard Felix B. Candia

Description: The story's about a daughter asking for advice from his father.

Experience: about 2 years

Time taken: i started at Feb. 5

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Raul Soria:

Needs improvement on body movement and timing. Minor work on lip sync

Inacio:

points for good characters, but not much else is happening, and you skipped a whole line by not showing his face

Alyssa FitzGerald:

My first advice is to avoid coloring things in if you are going to do traditional/hand drawn animation. What's more important is to have a good pencil sketch. There's limited to no movement in the torso or shoulders despite that being the root of all movement. The inbetweens on the head turns in particular are pretty ruough. The characters don't feel like they're in the scene because of perspective reasons so it'd be better to just remove the backgrounds entirely and just have a solid color clike black be there instead. The lighting is also inconsistent. Animation doesn't require that many details so all of the tucks and wrinkles in the fabric just add time that could be better served elsewhere.
My best advice is to get more comfortable with slow in and slow out, arcs, and improving your ability to draw in three dimensional space. The backs of the character's head feel flat despite being spheres, and you're mostly doing head turns which use those two principles of animation the most.

Robbie B.:

It feels really stiff and lacks fluidity. The characters body's need more movement, but overall good start.