Comments:
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Joshua:
Valiant effort, some actions are a little too 'much' for the level of 'intensity' in this dialogue. But keep it up, it only gets better from here.
Clayton Orgles:
So many great ideas here! I love your exaggerated animation style and how you've tried to convey the dialogue using body poses.
The main problem for me is that you have too many key poses. If he moved less, then then the exaggeration would have more impact. Use the pose at frame 26 as the base until 108, when he lunges forward; then use 126 until 196, then transition to 226 and stay there until the end. Check out "Cloudy With a Chance of Meatballs" or "Hotel Transylvania" for reference.
Like I said, lots of great ideas here. Keep it up! I'm looking forward to seeing more
Marianne Morin:
I love the movements! This scene can be improved with storytelling. You have a lot of skills, it just needs more context and a story behind it!
Ziya Shihab:
lip sync is really good but there are unnecessary actions included
Animator: Dikja Tama Loka
Description: Max looks disappointed with his wife.
Experience: 1 Year
Time taken: 3 Days (12 Hours)