Steve Luna:

I like the decisions you made but I don't think the expressions on red shirt were strong enough. Also, you broke the 180 rule with red shirt. But overall, good stuff!

Danny Kneip:

Though you've clearly jumped the line of action and confused your audience, in this case, I think it's forgivable because the opening shot is so crazy, we might as well also be jarred by the shot selection. Overall, I think it's well done and I really like the red shirt man turning on the cut F90, which puts everything into context. Was he also supposed to have a cane?? The performances are believable and well synced. This is a memorable piece for me.

Moy Parra:

I like the story Idea. A suggestion I have is that in this sequence, the cuts are a little difficult to follow as the center of action cuts from screen left to screen right to screen left again in a very short period. Maybe with a little less eye travel we can catch up more of the cation.

Amartya Mukherji:

nice, but need to give more smooth delays in the red T-shirt character like u have done in the Blue guy.

Ryan D Lowe:

I just noticed on my second watch here. Is the SL character supposed to have a cane? There isn't one there! I'm going to assume he is and leave the same rating. IT seems you would of seen how hard the hand hits a wall based on the skill of the rest of the piece. Well done!