Final Rating: 2.57. Finished 142 out of 151 entries.

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Animator: Jerry

Description: First time here beginner enjoy and critic how to create a better animation

Experience: 1

Time taken: 2 week


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Bruno de Coninck:

Did you work with key poses here? It doesn't look like. If you didn't read it, I strongly suggest you to take a look at the Richard's William great book : Animator Survival kit. By the way, your preview pic don't describe very well you animation I thin! ;-)

Eric Raffle:

you are not allowed to edit the audio only silence in the beginning and silence at the end no lifting of audio

Nathan Greensmith:

Some nice shots. Lip sync seems a little lost in the distance from the camera or due to character posing, but good effort.

Kyra Toomey:

I can see what you want of the acting, but it could get pushed more. Shift their hips and centre of balance around to make the poses better. Watch the way the gun is floating around. It would be better if they were more stable (still moving but very subtle mind you) or if they do move have them more like an extension of the hand. Last big thing would be to have a greater acting impact; drop the 2nd voices hand when he says "merciful", he says it forcefully and should have and equal action to go with it.