John McSwiggin:

Sound only comes in about halfway through, and cuts out again later

Kirsten Schow:

I am not sure if you are supposed to add in a break in the sound clip, so besides that, the animation still needs a lot of cleanup. There is a lot of "snap-to's" to objects, no moving holds. The camera swoop-in at the beginning is a little too long as well. This should focus more on the animation aspect. Keep going!

Adam Gillespie:

Frames 1-280: Unnecessary. I think you made too much work for yourself having ten seconds pass before the dialogue even begins. If your characters are in a specific setting then try to establish that setting with your composition of the background, props and camera placement.
Seeing as this piece of dialogue seems to come from the middle of a conversation if you want to start on an establishment shot, I would have the dialogue come in prior to seeing the person speaking, before cutting to the character at an appropriate point so that we have established the setting and then who's speaking without having to worry too much about other ways of giving the characters a lead into this point in the conversation.

Lea:

If you're planning to use this clip later I'd cut out the intro entirely. It's way too long and doesn't further the story.

Aaron McGriff:

The beginning doesn't help or add anything useful. The audio seems to have been edited too. Check the rules.

Zachary Checkeye:

Man that is ALOT of build up. Also, you edited the audio, I'm not sure that's allowed.