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Explorers of the Jungle Planet

by Chris Leykam

Final Rating: 5.89. Finished 18 out of 79 entries.

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Animator: Chris Leykam

Description: Our two heroes are exploring a far of jungle on a foreign planet capturing photos of the wildlife. All of a sudden a giant Venus Fly trap monster grabs Robin's camera and takes it away!

Experience: 1 year

Time taken: until the 25th of the month

Comments:

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Max:

I like the character movement. But you have the same character saying both lines which makes it a little confusing in the first half and I was a little confused with the snake creature. The animation is beautiful though! I love your style.

Warrenayiss:

bruh I was mitigated the animation is good but mixing the dialogue really bothers me

Henryk Jachimczyk:

Good draughtsmanship. The camera grab by the plant/snake was too quick.

Heiner:

Animationwise pretty good, but the first two lines were given to the same character even though it is clear that two different persons are speaking, which is confusing

Vicent Matoses:

drawings are great but i find it confusing at first

Timmy Kwee:

Drawings are nice! try to avoid too many thing going on and too many camera cuts.

Kaemon Ducarpe:

I like some of the ideas you were going for, especially with the guy (seemingly) talking to himself and the venus fly trap. But I feel like a lack of clarity hinders it by quite a bit. At first it seemed like the guy was talking to himself, especially in the next shot when it shows another guy with a small flower. I still don't know how they played into it at all, and at that point I'm confused as to what's going on in the short. If you can add more clarity to your shots - perhaps in the form of more exposition or focusing on one idea or theme at a time - it would really enhance the whole experience!