Ben Zettl:

Walk cycle from the bellybutton up needs the rest of it's motion. Continuity between shots is wrong. Body weight and balance need further addressing. Overall motion lacks followthrough/overlap.

Jez:

Ha ha ... like her rolling eyes when saying "of course you do" btw writing at the end is too small to read it foe a viewer.
Consider writing your message bigger & less if that was intention to read that by us or if that was just a prop suggesting a written page, that is another story.

Alexander Gray:

secondary action needs to be better.

Iverson:

I like it.