Connor Leuck:

Her reaction could be toned down a little bit.

Evelyn Hernandez:

"that jump tho" .. is a little too dramatic, looks like she got shot. I'm not sure if you acted out her part but you should make a reference video to help with that reaction.

ben malberg:

I like the poses. I think the girl's poses are stronger. I wasn't clear on why they both suddenly jumped around f135. Is she flinching from his dramatic pen stroke? If so, I think it would help if you moved the camera in more, it's difficult to see what's happening.