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"Loyalty" Cosa Nostra
by Salman Alam
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Sajid Ali Mansoori:
Great Work man.. nice Idea and animation.
good job dude!
There's just a bit of tweening on the red haired guy's hands when he says "I'm not afraid". They could use a little bit of work there.
When he leans forward it seems like he first moves his butt back and then his upper chest forward, it feels like they're separate actions instead of just one.
When the older guy moves his hand back after saying "you will be", at around frame 307, he could use a little overlap with his hand since he moves his body and hand back at the same time.
The dialogue goes well with the scene but I don't really know what you're trying to tell me with it.
Overall it's a really good animation! Good job!
Like your seen setup .But animation could be better .
Good job overall..!!!
Very nice and fun to watch
William Barry Eggington:
Cool mood. Not too bad.
Good one.. :)
Looks good, maybe make the older gentleman's head lead as he turns to make it more fluid? Still nice though.
good start. needs a lot of polish. a lot of the moves start and stop really abruptly. Definitely didn't need the opening shot. I appreciate the restraint in poses and natural ideas, so you're definitely on the right path.
Ejaz Shaik Ejaz:
This is best animation super awesome.......... <3
great job, looks great overall. On the older mans stepping back, it feels a little stiff, I'm sure you could rework that part. His arm with the cigarette also feels a bit stiff in how it moves.
the overall presentation is so good that it could have won the competition if the animation was well enough. But right now the animation needs a lot of improvement.
راحیل جاوید شیخ:
nice work dude....
I like the mood, very Godfathery. Malcolm's acting is great!
Cosa Nostra 4 Life :P
Nice work.. Keep the spirit high
Jo Anne Tan:
This looks pretty decent and nicely subtle, but the finger pointing is just too cliche and unnecessary. It could work for the older man because he is using the point as an emphasis, but for the younger man there isn't really a need to point on his "you" when he isn't singling the other guy out from a crowd of people.
Animator: Salman Alam
Description: Inspired by Sin City Movie
Experience: 1+ Year
Time taken: 1 Week