Jaimee Cowart:

lip syncing needs improvement and the animation seems too exaggerated facials are good tho

Bradley Adams:

Cameras need reworking, but overall a nice attempt. Also pay more attention to the lip sync, if it helps record yourself saying the script to get a better look at the mouth position for each letter.

Also regarding the Max rig those black eyelids are appearing due to them having inverted normals, I had the same probably and just flipped the normals to fix them.

William Barry Eggington:

whuh. . .

David Barrow:

That's a weird movement when the character starts toward the side then suddenly points at the camera. Confused again at the end when he comes in from the other side. The fact that the characters look so much alike contributed to that.

Jo Anne Tan:

This scene plays out almost like a musical, with dramatic poses and camera movements. Unfortunately, it doesn't really fit with the dialogue, and the animation lacks fundamentals. This really entertained me though, and would be great with the correct type of audio.