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First day at the doughnut shop

by Ossa

Final Rating: 6.15. Finished 26 out of 152 entries.

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Animator: Ossa

Description: Worked on for my animation class

Experience: 1 year of studying animation

Time taken: Like 3 weeks

Comments:

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Richard Clark:

I like your characters! Nice simplistic design! I feel like the pacing of the walks are too slow, though. When the left character punches the shoulder of the right character, I understand the should would react but why is his other shoulder coming up too? The motion on the right character's arm at "don't touch me!" is a bit strange in its poses. I guess mainly it's where the arm ends. It's almost like the arm comes to a rest on the wall in the back. Also, when his body rotates and moves back to face the other character, his lower body doesn't support it very much. Have him step into the motion a bit.

David S. Rodriguez:

Superb job, but I recommend having some darker colors that could make a little more visible contrast between the foreground and light brown void.