Andrew Marlow:

Animation is good, but it doesn't fit the audio at all

Richard Clark:

starting at frame 62, the mummy character's body hinges from his hips but the lower half doesn't move at all. And starting around frame 86, the hands on the hips goes up and down...why? Those hands also don't follow the body when it moves, they are always off from the body motion. Starting at around frame 111, the right character's hand moves back linear and stays in one pose. The swipe of the hand at the end at "Don't touch me" is a bit weak. I would try and create a stronger motion there. What's with the close up at the end? Seems unnecessary. Lip sync could improve.

David S. Rodriguez:

Interesting. I like the addition of something very different, but there is no enough clues in the narrative to illustrate what is going on.

Namie Palisoc:

The rendering and animation is good. I think the animation is quite smooth and the facial expressions and body language is also good. However, I do think the overall animation could have been more stronger to provide more personality with the characters such as stronger arcs. For example, the human could have done a much forceful shove to express more fear and discomfort from the mummy character. I am also confused what the exact story is in this animation. I am unsure of it is going for something purely comedic or dark comedic since it features a monster trying to scare or frighten the human I think? I am unsure what are the exact motives of this mummy character but if it was dark comedic router perhaps use a scarier mummy model instead of a cartoonish one. I am also confused why it takes place in the day if it is about a monster trying to scare a human. I do think the story needs more work in terms of character writing and staging.

Shura:

please make them kiss at frame 278