John Doree:

Very nice! Try to incorporate more mouth rounding for the round vowels to break up the lip synch into wide and round mouth shapes.

Eric Heaton:

The Timing and Spacing is really even and Slow throughout the whole shot

Also the Screen Left Character does not really change his facial expression at all or emote. Try acting it out yourself and use the eyebrows, eyelids and some Contrapasto on the body to create more dynamic clear poses to sell the scene