Conway Dobbs:

clear story good job, the movement is slow at points.

Andrew Viianen:

You're onto something here, I like your ideas. Things I'd suggest to work on are:

- More comfortable and stronger reading poses.

- Poses are hitting weak and seem to drift.

- The overlapping movement I think you're trying to go for (apologies if this is wrong) seem to be fighting each other. Try and be more picky with what will overlap to help hit and live in some poses longer.

Aidan Lonergan:

I find the cut a little off, maybe you could of have done it in one camera move.

talha bin khalid:

Ok ok, but timing can make much better.