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the centre of weirdness

by Shanti

Final Rating: 4.95. Finished 81 out of 152 entries.

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Animator: Shanti

Description: children are playing make believe in a park until it gets interrupted.

Experience: 1 year

Time taken: 2 weeks

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Richard Clark:

At first, I couldn't tell if the girl was speaking or not. Maybe not have her head down at the beginning or have her closer to camera as in a head shot. Arms are twinning at times. I would try to come up with better posing than just standing straight and straight at camera. And the thing with the mother at the end seems like an afterthought instead of fleshed out.