Comments:
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William Barry Eggington:
You'll do well in the next one. :-)
Gabriel:
a bit underacted in the end
Ramsey Parks:
Poor lip sync and the characters don't react very well to there lines.
Ed Seager:
Cool
Danny Kneip:
A really fun render and concept, but neither character really exhibits any emotion, but I hear it in the audio so it must exist. Additionally, the lip sync on Luke's first line is very hard to read. Use the jaw, Luke!
Mitch Coote:
Animation doesn't match the intensity of the dialogue.
Rosalia:
the character seems very static while he is moving his laser-sword around, he only moves his head and arms. also he could use more facial expression
Rob Small:
I like the style, but the lip synching could use some exaggeration to make it more exciting.
Ian Alexander Hanson:
Cool concept!
Bodies not really moving too much and spinning saber around goes on too long.
Nathan Younger:
characters are copy written- animation is good
Terressa:
Cute concept. Both characters could benefit from more dynamic poses, both feel too upright and their silhouettes do not read well. The lip sync for Luke/Marty does not read at all. Staging feels too imbalanced I would change how the characters are positioned, if you flipped the Luke/Marty drawings so he was more screen left and turn Ben/Doc 3/4 facing center it would feel more balanced, just make sure not to cut his head off with the saber :)
Julien Ferritto:
Good idea, good tribute but.. I think we don't feel the expressions of Luke.. It's too "sweet" ^^
Animator: Patrick William Shaw
Description: Traditional 2D Animation done within Photoshop, on a Cintiq.
Experience: 5 months
Time taken: 3 weeks